Anybody good at creating Resumes or critiquing them?

I know some people...well you and Bob know the same people so it may not work.

 

Sue agreed with what the others were saying. She suggested changing the objective to something more like this and removing the oldest jobs you had noted. She felt the job hopping may work against you even though it is what put you through school. She suggested Google "resume" and you can find templates and advise.

Taylor B.
Objective
A challenging position where my wide range of experience and skills can be applied in a mutually beneficial manner.

Education
·Arizona State University B.S. Justice Studies Jan 2008-May 2010
§Study in social justice and critical inquiry
·Mesa Community College A.A. Business graduated May 2008
§Study in business operations and management

Skills
·Working knowledge of Microsoft Word, Excel and Power Point
·Customer service
·Front office management
·Quickly adapt to new and changing environments
·Flexible team player that works well in groups
·Require little to no supervision on tasks or projects
·Type 40 wpm and 80 kpm
·Project management
·Administrative assistant

Experience
USDA Tonto National Forest 03/09-Present
Position: Information Receptionist
Duties:
·Federal Collections officer
·Invoice/bill creation, tracking and management
·Used Cash/Lockbox/FTRS systems
·Customer service and sales to wide diversity of clients
·Part of AZ Council for Enhancing Recreation & Tourism (ACERT) map update – coordinator for six AZ national forests updates and edits
·Multiple Smokey Bear appearances, local, state and national events
·Lead program coordinator for Cabalas’ national camping week event
·Office equipment use
·Administrative assistant
·Information and publication organization and tracking

Walgreens Mail Service Facility 12/08-02/09
Position: RX Script Exceptions Handler temp

Duties:
·Clearing exceptions to Rx prescriptions
·Processing new prescriptions
·Registering patient insurance data
·Entering information into a database
·Tracking patient information
·General database usage to perform the essential function of the job

ComericaBank 11/07-12/08
Position: Customer Service Rep II

Duties:
·Processing customer deposits, withdrawals and payments
·Customer service: Information on all aspects of financial services
·Process night and mail deposits
·Off-site product presentations: Corporations, non-profits, educational institutions and small businesses
·Customer and bank information management and tracking
·Assisted banker in setting up/closing accounts
·Location start up/opening
·Sales lead generation and development

Honeywell 07/07-11/07
Position: Global Financial Services Intern

Duties:
·Created new method of tracking invoices
·Created and analyzed work-flow charts/spreadsheets
·Designed new internal website for international use
·Linked purchase orders to external and internal database
·Implemented new database tracking of invoices
·Conducted first pass editing of new service contracts
·Organized team meetings and took general notes

Cable One Inc. 09/05-07/07
Position: Senior Retention Rep and Trainer

Duties:
·Trained incoming crew members
·Developed training material
·Benchmarked competitor products
·Trouble shooting problem solving for customers
·Resolved account issues and scheduled appropriate service calls
·Sales consultation: phone, internet and cable
·Operated GENESYS dialer system



Awards and Volunteer work:
Tonto National Forest SPOT award; creating a template for the ACERT map project 08/09
Comerica award for performance resulting in a raise 02/09
Honeywell internship extended based on performance 09/07
Cable One achievement award for highest customer connections saved in a day multiple times
Cable One achievement award for top sales and service multiple times

Junior High church leader responsible for programming and teaching every week 06-08
Earth day cleanup crew member 99-09
Four Peaks trash cleanup crew member 09-10
Boy Scout community service projects 1997-1999.

 

Here is the first revision. I have deleted some of my old jobs that just really didn't do anything for me and reworded others. So fare I'm at two pages.

[FONT=&quot]Taylor B[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Education[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
Arizona State University [/FONT][FONT=&quot]B.S. Justice Studies Jan 2008-May 2010[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]-Study in social justice, critical inquiry and analytical thinking[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Mesa Community College A.A. Business graduated May 2008[/FONT]
-[FONT=&quot]Study in business operations and management [/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Skills [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Project management [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Working knowledge of Microsoft Word, Excel and Power Point[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Customer service [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Administrative assistant [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Front office management[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Quickly adapt to new and changing environments[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Flexible team player that works well in groups[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Require little to no supervision on tasks or projects[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Type 40 wpm and 80 kpm[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]
[/FONT] [FONT=&quot]Experience[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]USDA Tonto National Forest [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Position: Information Receptionist[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Duties:[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Federal Collections officer[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Invoice/bill creation, tracking and management[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Processed Cash/Lockbox/FTRS systems[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Delivered customer service and sales to wide diversity of clients[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Member of the AZ Council for Enhancing Recreation & Tourism (ACERT) map update[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Multiple Smokey Bear appearances: local, state and national events[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Lead program coordinator for Cabalas’ national camping week event[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Provided administrative assistance [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Organize and maintain public information and publications[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Comerica Bank [/FONT][FONT=&quot]
[/FONT][FONT=&quot][/FONT][FONT=&quot]Position: Customer Service Rep II[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Duties:[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
[/FONT] ·[FONT=&quot]Processed customer deposits, withdrawals and payments [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Analyzed new customer products[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Processed night and mail deposits[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Coordinated off-site product presentations: Corporations, non-profits, educational institutions and small businesses[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Customer /bank information management and tracking[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Assisted banker in setting up/closing accounts[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Part of the location start up team[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Sales lead generation and development[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Honeywell [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Position: Global Financial Services Intern[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Duties:[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
[/FONT] ·[FONT=&quot]Created new method of tracking invoices that reduced late net 60 late payments[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Analyzed work-flow and created new charts/spreadsheets[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Designed new internal website for international use that promoted communication between regions[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Linked purchase orders to external and internal database[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Implemented new database tracking of invoices[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Conducted first pass editing of new service contracts[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Organized team meetings[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Cable One Inc. [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]
[/FONT] [FONT=&quot]Position: Senior Retention Rep and Trainer[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]
[/FONT] [FONT=&quot]Duties:[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
[/FONT] ·[FONT=&quot]Trained incoming crew members [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Developed training material[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Benchmarked competitor products[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Troubleshooting and problem solving for customers[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Resolved account issues and scheduled appropriate service calls[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Sales consultation: phone, internet and cable[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Operated GENESYS dialer system[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Awards and Volunteer work:[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Tonto National Forest SPOT award; creating a template for the ACERT map project 08/09[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Comerica award for performance resulting in a raise 02/09[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Honeywell internship extended based on performance 09/07[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Cable One achievement award for highest customer connections saved in a day multiple times[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Cable One achievement award for top sales and service multiple times[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Junior High church leader responsible for programming and teaching every week 06-08[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Earth day cleanup crew member 99-09[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Four Peaks trash cleanup crew member 09-10[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Boy Scout community service projects 1997-1999[/FONT]


[FONT=&quot]References upon request[/FONT]

 

Looking good. If I may suggest, DrPie already mentioned that you might want to quantify your achievements. I would agree with him. Here is an example that I have used for making it sound like something was achieved at the end of the day and that I am beneficial to hire:

[FONT=&quot] [/FONT][FONT=&quot]Based on expertise and performance, selected to mentor 2 employees over a 4 month period resulting in them becoming self reliant in the industry and a key to the teams' success[/FONT][FONT=&quot][/FONT]

If you start with what you have done then explain the benefits, it makes your statements sound stronger. I would give this a shot on at least one bullet for every job you are going to list.

Hope this helps and keep plucking at it... it only gets better the more you work on it.

 

tweak objective to be more specific to the job/industry you are applying for, and put your Honeywell experience to the top, or higher

 

i would put skills after the experience .... also what chris says objective should be your real objective .. .it catches more attention if its honest

since i am in the Hospitality industry i would put something like this "
To utilize my extraordinary skills and background in the hospitality industry and grow my career in what I know and do best."

 

I disagree - When i interview, I look at details like what the person is made off. I know its hard to work in fast food industry or wal mart type places and if someone worked there in their past, they know how to deal with BS. They are strong and when it comes to work they are able to do whatever it takes even if its pizza delivery or flipping burgers... i started off cooking Tacos and I’m proud of it. That’s what made me strong and no harm in putting that in your resume.. .Just my personal opinion.

 

You gotta approach your resume like a date. Want some action? What do you have to offer? You have 15 seconds to make an impression, do it with one page only, leave out the fluff.

Everyone wants a mutally beneficial gig, what do you do? Too generic. Must be something such as seeking a law enforcement position, money manager, etc.

Keep it one page. No need to list a community college education, just the BS. And a short paragraph on what you did at each gig followed by bullet points, not all of them.

Remove the boy scout stuff. What can you fix or solve for your employer?

Your future employer can pick and choose, make it so they choose you.

Then sign up for linkedin.com and start making connections for this resume of yours. Good luck.

 

I choose to remove the Objective part, as others have already mentioned. If they have my resume, they know what my objective is.

I'm a little confused so please bare with me, wouldn't I add something like:
[FONT=&quot]"Based on expertise and performance, selected to mentor 2 employees over a 4 month period resulting in them becoming self reliant in the industry and a key to the teams' success[/FONT]" in a cover letter?

 

Remember you are looking to impress people. Make sure you are specific. Be sure to include things that make you the person that they should hire. Each job should have a separate resume tweaked specifically for the position that you are wanting to get hired for. Your current objective needs to be very specific. If you want to add in a career goal objective that is a little more vague that would be fine. Remember always include a cover letter to a specific person and keep your resume under 2 pages whenever possible.

 

Cover letters are for introducing yourself and really selling you to a person. Start vague and narrow down your objectives. A cover letter should not be more than a page. Remember you are trying to sell yourself to them not make them bored to death reading pages about some guy they dont know.

 

Ok so I have taken peoples advice and started adjusting my Resume to the requirements.

I've written a cover letter for one job so far, and others don't allow for this.

Is there any more help someone could provide me with drafting cover letters? I don't want to be long winded but still want to show the star that I am lol.

 

Thanks man I really appreciate it. My base resume is on page one, and I've been tailored to each application.

Here is my attempt at a Cover letter, below you will find the requirements for the job and the points I'm trying to cover in the letter.

[FONT=&quot]Attn: HR[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Coash & Coash, Inc.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]1802 N. 7Th Street
Phoenix, AZ 85006[/FONT]




[FONT=&quot]Dear Coash and Coash:[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot] Hello, my name is Taylor Bxxx and I am a graduating student from ASU in the Justice Studies program. I am in the process of looking for a career in the field of justice and law and came across the position within your office. I was very excited to see you were looking for someone in the field my career path is moving, I feel that I would be a well qualified candidate for this position based on my educational background and real world work experience.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]In my field of study I have completed several pre-law classes that have helped shape my knowledge of the legal system and set me apart from many of my colleagues. Additionally, I have also had the chance to work on legal contracts with an internship at Honeywell, where it was my responsibility to review them for my manager before being signed. In most of my positions, I have been given tasks to work on with little or no supervision and have met the regular deadlines set. In my recent job with the USDA Tonto National Forest, I was assigned the task of creating an Excel template for the Arizona Council for Recreational and Tourism (ACERT) map update. Working within a team of members, I was instrumental in coordinating 6 national forest updates accurately and on time. [/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Based on my recent accomplishments and education, I feel I would be a valuable asset in your office because of the experience in the customer service industry and my ability to lean and adapt quickly to new and changing environments. Also, I feel that as an employee I could learn much more about the legal system from your company and would gain valuable experience for my career in the legal system.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]I would like to discuss my qualification for this position with you further in an interview, please contact me at 480-555-5555 or somethingcatchy@abc.com (not my real e-mail) so that we could meet at your earliest convenience.[/FONT]


[FONT=&quot]Best regards,[/FONT]

Taylor Bxxxxx[FONT=&quot]
[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Job Requirements[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Job requirements:[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Work with little or no supervision[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Pay attention to details[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Follow verbal and written instructions accurately and promptly[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Prioritize multiple job responsibilities[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Computer literate[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Experienced in Microsoft Word, Excel, and Outlook[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Learn new tasks quickly[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Operate office equipment[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Customer service experience[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Flexible team player[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]* Legal background is helpful[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]The cover letter should reveal things about you that a resume can't,[/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]why you are interested (and hopefully excited) about the job, [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]why you would be a good fit for them, [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]why they would be a good fit for you (employment is a two way street). [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]What is your attitude about work? [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]What have past managers/supervisors said about you? [/FONT]
·[FONT=&quot]Reveal what you know about the hiring company to show that you actually have a clue about who they are and what they do. This helps them picture you fitting in rather than just being on a job-fishing expedition. [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]You need to sell yourself and set yourself apart from the other applicants.

In the letter, specifically request the opportunity for an interview.[/FONT]

 

Well I just wanted to give this an update: After much reviewing and many edits, I have come up with what I think is a decent resume. I actually have an interview with University of Phoenix in a call center. Not what I wanted, but what has been provided and in this market I can't be too choosy right?

 

Gentlemen--

Im a recruiter and stare at resumes all day long -- Ive hired over 1000 people in the past 2 years...PM me if you want me to check it out/give feedback.

 

Wow that's really well written man, thanks for posting that up for me

+1rep for you