Cool zombie story from a guy @ AR15.com

Im on chapter 10 right now but I wanted to share

http://www.ar15.com/forums/topic.html?b=10&f=20&t=633207&page=1

 

This guy needs an editor. I read the first chapter and found at least 5 misspellings and countless grammatical mistakes.

Nothing turns me away from a published story faster.

 

lol well im pretty bad at grammar so it didnt bother me too much

 

Thanks for sharing bro. I read all of it and I want moar!

 

that was pretty good

 

Yea It defiently left me wanting to read more!

a zombie story writen by an actual gun enthusiast

 

not too bad tho. I enjoyed it and eagerly await more

 

Just in case anyone wants to know, chapter 1 from part two is up now.

 

sweet! im gonna catch up on it today

 

just read the last entry...SHIT I want to read MORE!!!!

 

makes me want to get out my BOB and re-organize it lol

 

all my stuff is just randomly thrown in the bottom of my closet. I need to get it all together and keep it in my damn bag.

 

I was the same way i just went out and got a sterlite container and crammed everything in there.worst case i through the box in the back of the taco and head for the hills. if i gotta ditch that ill have my kelty pack loaded and ready to go lol

 

just read a couple paragraphs and I couldn't go on. Yes, misspellings and grammar errors, but the changing tenses were what really killed me. I 'do' A, B and C then I 'did' D, E and F. I also expected to read about a prepared, self-sufficient individual and in the first couple minutes I find he's not carrying a weapon or a flashlight, his phone isn't charged and he's unemployed, living in his parents' basement. I hope the zombies eat his effing brain.

 

^ wow talk about a negative nancy

 

Really??? It was not that bad. Who really gives a fuck about changing tenses. You also didnt like it because of the fact that he was at a job interview, lived at home and his phone died? Has your phone ever died? Have you ever been job-less? He was a ex-Marine who is trying to adapt into a civi life style. he prolly lives with his parents cause he didnt own a home because the military usually gives him all that. he was trying to get a job aanyway. And he did have a weapon. it was in his car. a glock if i remember right. When you write a flaw less story about a zombie attack where the main character is un-realistically prepared and everything goes right, post it on here and let me know ill read it

 

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I do - an educated reader trying to suspend disbelief. The errors pull me right out of the story, which may have been entertaining otherwise. I admit I was pretty harsh in my judgment, but I thought this was a place where we discussed things - good or bad. There's no need to be offended if one guy doesn't like a story that you like.

 

I enjoyed it because it was a zombie story written by an actual gun enthusiast and knows about the topic rather than just some guy that watched a zombie flick once and thinks he's an expert.

 

soory if i came off as a dick it just seemed like you only tried to see the negative....besides all this lybia and egypt shit pisses me off....but thats all for a different thred